National NaNoWriMo Doing Month!

National NaNoWriMo Doing Month!
#76
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Okay, there are a few bits that are a little confusing, but on the whole this is still holding up surprisingly well in terms of coherence.

The most confusing part is still Crowstone's section near the end of Chapter 2; other than that, we've got several different things going on with Chris and the doll right now. That said, there are several different plotlines that could be followed up on, so there's no need to rush to explain this one.

Here's a short list of plotlines and related questions that whoever starts the next chapter might want to consider. This is not intended to be an exhaustive list or anything.
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#77
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I will start chapter four- if i can do it in the next thirty minutes that is.
By the way that stuff i did for chapter two-
I thought that the girl in the backseat was the girl from the beginning with the doll
I had no idea what zembra was forever 12 and in fact i thought she and hanson were still in their office back home.
then the story continued and it appears that the girl in the backseat totally just killed connie on purpose and not by accident and is also working with someone who may or may not be zembra

and as we later find out the girl from the beginning is Jessica

that's how I interpreted things

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alright, a start to chapter four, have fun!
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#78
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W

wasn't the girl from Chapter One (Jessica) carried off with Chris by SJR?

I guess Slorange's subtle retcon that it was Zembra messing with Connie anyway smoothed it out, but by my estimation Jessica is somewhere near where Chris is.
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#79
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I did mention Zembra's youth a few times, but really, not catching that it was her wasn't that big of a deal. The bigger source of confusion is that my section ended with Zembra falling unconscious and then yours had her calling Connie.
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#80
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Oh, yeah. That too.
I'd assumed that was Connie's plan to kidnap her.
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#81
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what?
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"He hated kids, and kids who were over thirty were even worse."
oh. Oh. I thought that meant Zembra was over thirty and was acting like a kid. :/
no biggie though!

So, the way i understand it....
Plot summary so far
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character guide: (not very in-depth, doesn't have character traits, for example. i'll leave you guys to fill those parts in if you want)
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Did i miss anything or get anything wrong?

I suspect some people might say that Delia and Zembra are the same girl, but I think it makes more sense actually if you read it where the two girls are different people. That's what I've been doing and it makes sense to me! (ironically but not coincidentally, as the one who authored the apparently most confusing passage, I seem to be the least confused by what's going on)

Maybe at the end we could go back and edit things just a little bit, such as taking out this paragraph
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because it implies that Zembra is in some sort of office typing things and we all agree that she isn't?
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#82
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NO RETCONS >:C
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#83
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Okay, I'm writing now, maybe I can clean up some of the messier bits of plot.
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#84
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The only problem with that, Crowstone, is that not only is Zembra not in an office typing things, she should probably still be unconscious at the diner at that point, and therefore incapable of making a phone call.
I like Slorange's interpretation that it's not really Zembra on the phone, it's an impostor.
But... if Connie DIDN'T drug Zembra to make her fall unconscious, then why did she fall unconscious, and what's going to happen to her after? We still need to answer that.
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#85
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I just figured the bad guy(s) just used their powers to turn the lights out and make Zembra unconscious, then re-awaken her under mind control so that she could make the call.

but imposter works too!

so
that was an imposter on the phone then? And the imposter is the unknown woman?
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#86
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I just wrote another section, I'm hoping it might clear some things up.

1059 words into Chapter 4, we're catching up.

Edit: It just struck me that it would be more convenient if the link to Chapter 4 were on the most recent page.
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#87
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In that case, off we goooo
edit: god DAMMIT docs why aren't you working
edit: Opera you are now my writing browser.
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#88
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That took longer than expected o_o
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#89
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Time to do thing in thing I think
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#90
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I'm sorry, I don't think I can do this. I've deleted the tiny bit I managed to write. Someone else please take it from here.
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#91
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Alright, even though i went rather recently...


And we continue!
Someone elses turn now
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#92
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And now I wrote a section. Chapter 4 is at 3489 words in total. I'm hoping we avoid just getting into a cycle of the same three people, but hopefully that pattern should break soon.
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#93
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@_____@ grumble grumble grumble
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#94
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4397 words. I have no idea what the hell is going on anymore.
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#95
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Dang it, we did get into a cycle.

Oh well, hopefully somebody other than the three of us can finish off the chapter.
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#96
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/me glare of shaaaame
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#97
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something something i forget what this originally said
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#98
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Crowstone, are you doing it? Is someone else doing it? Because if not, I'll do it.
Lemme pop on IRC and see what's up.

EDIT: Crowstone has it covered. Guess I'll start the next chapter or something.
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#99
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CHAPTER FOUR aka The Three People Cycle Chapter

Crowstone - DragonFogel - AgentBlue - Crowstone - DragonFogel - AgentBlue - Crowstone

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Chapter 5
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RE: National NaNoWriMo Doing Month!
Someone else should start the next chapter. Don't wait for me to do it.
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